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Posted On: 10/13/2024 9:35:04 AM
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hey My, help us out a bit more.
You highlight Drs. Frias, Bianchi, and Sacha. We all know about the revered Dr. Sacha. I don't know who Dianne Bianchi is, and (more importantly) what she has to do with Leron; googling Bianchi and Leron gives no results. I see Antonio Frias is at the Or. Health Sciences Un., but otherwise don't know what he has to do with Leron either.
I guess what I'm saying is that you present a lot of material, but it sometimes needs headings, or topic sentences -- something to explain why you are bringing all these various factoids to our attention. TIA.
You highlight Drs. Frias, Bianchi, and Sacha. We all know about the revered Dr. Sacha. I don't know who Dianne Bianchi is, and (more importantly) what she has to do with Leron; googling Bianchi and Leron gives no results. I see Antonio Frias is at the Or. Health Sciences Un., but otherwise don't know what he has to do with Leron either.
I guess what I'm saying is that you present a lot of material, but it sometimes needs headings, or topic sentences -- something to explain why you are bringing all these various factoids to our attention. TIA.
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